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Some people say music is a good way of bringing people of different cultures and ages together To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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Many
people
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 believe that
music
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 is the best way to connect
people
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 from different
cultures
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 and
ages
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 together.
Music
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 is magic that creates
people
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’s excited emotions of all
ages
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 and
cultures
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 together. There is no doubt that
music
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 is a cultural bridge for
people
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 to connect together without
cultures
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 and
ages
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. On the one hand,
music
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 is no age and language barrier. Traditional
music
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 and national
music
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 that all citizens in the country who speak the same language from different generations listen to traditional
music
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 and national
music
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.
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, stronger
people
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 is a traditional
song
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 in Hong Kong. It sang by the famous singer Aaron Kwok. The
song
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 was famous in the 90s. Nowadays, the
song
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 is the theme
song
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 of the athletic meet in secondary schools in Hong Kong.
Thus
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,
music
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 is not had a generation gap between citizens.
On the other hand
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,
music
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 is no cultural limit. Nowadays, Korean
music
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 is the most popular in the world. A lot of
people
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 like to
listen
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 Korean
music
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although
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 they do not know the meaning of the
song
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. They love the atmosphere during the
music
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.
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,
people
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 fight in Korea to have a Korean concert. They enjoy
people
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 singing together and dance to together like in the Big bang concert. In conclusion,
music
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 is not any barrier between
cultures
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 and
ages
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. It makes
people
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 together from different countries and languages.
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, I agree that
music
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 is a great way of bringing
people
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 together of different
cultures
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 and
ages
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 together.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • universal language
  • evoke
  • connect
  • diverse audiences
  • cultural exchange
  • generational gaps
  • shared experiences
  • unifying force
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