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Some people think that traditional education is better than online education.To what extent do you agree or dissagree?

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believed that traditional
education
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 has more advantages than online
education
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. I disagree with
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 opinion and think that online
education
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 is far superior , and more advanced than traditional
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 and has more to offer.
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,online
education
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 is easily accessible to everyone and offers a number of courses that meet the needs of most
students
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.Local colleges and universities are often limited to certain courses. Many
students
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 still live with their families in commuter towns and villages away from major cities and towns where most of the educational centres are located .Online courses enable
students
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 to live in one place and graduate from universities and colleges worldwide.
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,
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 can live and
work
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 in Ireland and take up a course at Cambridge university in Great Britain. Many
students
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 combine studying with
work
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 to pay for their accommodation, food and clothes, many of them
work
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 during the day , and some
work
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 in the evenings. Online
education
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 centres provide flexible self -pace programs which are very convenient for
students
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 who
work
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.
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 online
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 has many advantages, it
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 has some drawbacks too. Traditional
education
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 involves attending classes where
students
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 interact with one another and with the teacher.
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 helps them to develop a sense of teamwork and improve their communication skills .Those skills can be very helpful when they decide to pursue their careers.
Students
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 who self-study at home often lack those skills.
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,
although
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 there is a belief that traditional
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 is better, there are other important factors to consider
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 as the needs of every student and their preferences In my opinion, online teaching can meet the majority of
students
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' needs and is better than traditional
education
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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
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