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Scientists believe that computers will become more intelligent than human beings. Some people find it a positive development while others think it is negative development. Discuss both points and give your own opinion.

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There were always controversial arguments regarding artificial
intelligence
.
While
 some
people
 think that computers should never be developed to be smarter than humans, others oppose it and say it is a positive advancement. In
this
 essay, I will argue both perspectives
as well as
 elucidate why I believe
this
 development is crucial for humanity. On the one hand,
people
 who are against artificial
intelligence
, they assuming that computer evolution will replace
people
's vacancies, and
as a result
 of that, many
people
 will find themselves jobless, which is the case in some countries at present time, as a clear example China, China had substituted a number of medical staff with
robots
, the mentioned
robots
 can conduct many medical procedures starting with a straightforward process like blood collecting from patients and ending with complicated operations just like eyes surgery.
Furthermore
, these
robots
 could be hazardous to humankind somehow,
for instance
, fictional movies that predict,
robots
 that are used in wars, could turn against humanity as it has independent thinking
in other words
 artificial
intelligence
.
On the other hand
, the side that encourages artificial
intelligence
, including me, as those computers have the ability to perform extremely complicated calculations and resolve complex issues on behalf of humanity.
for example
, developed high-quality computers liable to perform complicated steps to predict crises in advance
such
 as hurricanes, floods and earthquakes.
in addition
,
this
 development can contribute to advancements in science, especially, in discovering space.
Finally
, Computer
intelligence
 plays a vital role in our lives enhancement, despite the downsides that come alongside these advancements, I believe the artificial
intelligence
 revolution has outstanding benefits.
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