Some people believe that nowadays we have too many choices. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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The divorce rate has risen in the past few years, some socialists claim that it is the result of excessive choices. From a personal perspective, I disagree with the former argument, believing that opportunities are still limited by traditional thoughts in society.
To begin
with,
although
compared with the past, there are more job opportunities provided, new graduates are constrained to intelligent work because of job discrimination.
For example
, I have a friend who is interested in handicrafts, yet she is forced to enter a college to obtain a scholarship
that is
irrelevant to her interest. Apparently, becoming a carpenter is not a respected job in Taiwan and there are more blue-collar jobs which are deemed low-class and most workers would avoid choosing them. Another reason that leads to constrained chances is the unbalanced development between the urban and the countryside.
For instance
, The salary level of Taipei, which is the capital of Taiwan, is significantly higher than in Tainan.
As a result
, many youngsters swarm into Taipei to get
highly-paid
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jobs rather than staying in their hometown.
Similarly
, the medical condition of a city is
also
a contributing factor. Families with the elderly would prefer to live in big cities to get better medical care.
In other words
, the residences are highly restricted by the developments of the place. In conclusion, though some socialists might think there are abundant choices for people, some decision-making processes are greatly confined
due to
discrimination and financial or medical conditions. Perhaps after fixing all possible faults, the way of making decisions can be more free and diverse.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • overwhelmed
  • decision fatigue
  • paralysis by analysis
  • consumerism
  • globalization
  • personal autonomy
  • market saturation
  • option overload
  • decision-making process
  • psychological well-being
  • buyer's remorse
  • customization
  • trade-offs
  • minimalism
  • information superhighway
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