It is sometimes argued that personal achievement depends on a fair and equitable society or personal freedom. In my opinion, I believe that these two factors are prime drivers for individuals to achieve more.

At present, it has been

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that the relationship between individual accomplishment and equal rights

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developing day by day. Certain people believe that a

person

can reach the peak of success

while

living in identical communities.

On the other hand

, another group of people convey that one can gain whatever he wants from his career only when he does not have any boundaries for being

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or unsuccessful owing to his personal strength. In the forthcoming paragraph, I will explain both

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explanation.

To begin

with, equal realm refers to a community where all the people get the same facilities from that realm.

Moreover

, the laws enforce equally among the public. So, it does not matter if the

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person

is rich or poor, he will receive the exact punishment. For

this

, whenever a

person

will think to do something illegal, deep in his mind he will be scared because of the regulations.

As a result

, there will be less crime in the region.

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, in an identical place, an individual does not have to worry about the environment, he can only focus

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achievement without worrying about other aspects of life.

Hence

, after

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he will get a decent job

according to

his merit as there is no corruption in the corporate field because of the same priority. Alternatively, others hold the opinion that a

person

can be successful in a free country where he has the autonomy to do things

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the way he wants.

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,

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he has

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if he is not able to score

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the test, he can not get a good job. In

this

case, if the

person

has money and power, he not only gets the score but

also

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the perfect employment for him.

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, I have seen one of my friends

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doing a job in a high position in a pharmaceutical company after graduating. He was not better

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top of that he always copied me. I had to struggle a lot for getting

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, as I did not know anyone from the field. The reason why he got it

due to

his dad, who was a production manager of that company.

To sum up

, from my perspective, I believe each side has

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and adverse

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on

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society. Government should ensure strict regulations and laws in the country.

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must follow the rules provided by the authority.