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An increasing number of professional such as doctor and teacher are leaving their own poorer countries to work in developed countries. what problem does this cause ? what can be done to deal with this situation ?

#doctor #teacher #countries #work #situation
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It is well-established fact that most
of
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well-educated
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the well-educated
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peoples
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 have
tendency
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 to emigrate from their undeveloped
country
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countries
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 to developed
countries
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toughts
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thoughts
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 and I will give some possible solutions. There are a lot of factors that lead
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some sophisticated
people
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choose
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 developed
countries
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 for their
career
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 and
live
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 with, in some poor
countries
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 there are
not
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 appropriate wages or job opportunities for skilled
people
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,recent research in
india
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 illustrates
teachers
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teachers'
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 salaries
is
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 even less than labourers.Or the government or society
dont
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don't
 pay enough attention to some professional and well-informed
people
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 as doctors or
scientist
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.All of
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this
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 reasons persuade professional
peoples
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people
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 to emigrate to developed
countries
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 for
better
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a better
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 life. In order to solve
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 problem,First of all, the
government
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 duties in
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 issue should not be taken lightly.Authorities should improve the condition for knowledgeable
people
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 or increase the
amount
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 of their wages and they can
also
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 dedicate some benefit to encourage them to stay in their country.these skilled
people
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 not only can improve the condition in healthcare sectors but
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 every
nations
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 for advancement in many aspects need educated
people
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 to save their country from poverty and
illeteracy
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illiteracy
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,with cooperation with the government and educated
people
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,under-developed
countries
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 can succeed and conquer
from
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poverty and illiteracy.
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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    • Sentence 2 - Example
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