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Some people believe that not all criminals should be kept in prison, but that some of them should be allowed to do unpaid work to help the community.

#people #criminals #prison #work #community
It is argued that not only the evolution in
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technology can support
to ascertain
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 the details of the crimes, but
also
 it shows the ways to prevent some lawbreaking which will be occurred in the future.
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,
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technology
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 developments can determine how to find
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 by using gadgets.
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,there will be an excellent impact on precluding
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felonies. To embark upon, nowadays technology has been a well-known part of our lives as it is effortless to do all of our activities.Modern equipment can be regarded as reducing the percentage of criminal actions due to solving the felony. Surveillance camera
setting
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 in every corner and nook of a city or any place is a crucial solution for the police since it gives the opportunity to find out how the crime occurred.
For example
, in 2020 in the UK these kinds of
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help
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 to define
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half of the lawbreakings
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 place.
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, the developments in science have a
perecious
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precious
 role to control preventing
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crime which makes people get in trouble. It is known that metal devices are installed at the entrance of buildings
such
 as hospitals,schools and malls.
This
 can support not to manage to steal something from somewhere or to enter with metal things which causes danger the
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 of people
such
 as
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 or shots.
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 two days ago the thief who tried to shoplift
my
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 uncle’s shop was noticed
while
 he was passing through
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 apparat. In conclusion, the proliferation
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 automation can affect the progress of crime considerably. Both it has the aim of solving the felony and keeping not happening the infraction.
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