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Some people think that the best way to improve road transport safety is to let the driver test each year. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Nobody would dispute the fact that the security of transportation is prominent to sustain the quality of life.
While
people
 in some countries think that implementing an annual
driver
test
 is the best method to reduce the occurrence of car accidence, in my opinion, I completely disagree with
this
 statement. Commence with, there are several reasons why a driving
test
 is not an efficient way to enhance
safety
. It is true to say that it would be a waste of resources to reserve
such
 a place for
people
 to take the
test
. If it was a compulsory subject for every
driver
, the number of
test
 takers would have been increased in a timely manner.
Furthermore
, participating in the
test
 every year does not help to reduce the risk of accidents. To emphasise, it is
also
 difficult for the government to manipulate every resident in the country, especially
people
 living in rural areas. In my opinion, I believe there must be a better way to improve road
safety
.
Next,
there are a few ways the country could do in order to approach the objective.
Firstly
, the government can install more CCTV on the roadside, it can prevent
people
 from breaking the law and force them to obey the rules.
Secondly
, car learning centres can be more restricted in the driving rules which makes
test
 takers participate in the
test
 more seriously.
Finally
, the politician should add a new rule where a new
driver
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 should be supervised by their parents, and if they were caught not following the rule, they shall be banned from driving the car for a period of time. In conclusion,
safety
 on the road is crucial and it should not be neglected,
however
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 I believe there has been
the
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a
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 best way to improve
safety
 and security rather than just forcing
people
 to take the yearly
driver
test
.
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