new research has shown that overeating has a bigger problem than hunger, what are the reasons for this problem? how can it be solved?

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many

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face with issue of overeating

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leads to obesity or various other deceases. In

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planned

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diet

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and state of

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depression

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faced by these

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also

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see some solutions

how

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control

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issue. To embark upon, overeating is a phenomenon observed in

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of all age categories, but nowadays much

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in teenagers, one of the prominent

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reason

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is that

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follow any

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leads to many deceases

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as obesity

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clinical

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depression

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one of the major reasons why

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face

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people

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control

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start eating more and more

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there are

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people

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who are addicted to eating

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and

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control

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over their

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intake.

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to solve

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phenomenon,

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it is important to root cause

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why

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problem, whether it is

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proper

diet

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plan

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or clinical

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or anything else. After the first step, if the

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is no planned

diet

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people

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should consult a

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dietitian

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daily

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daily

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case

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the

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is clinical

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people

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should consult a

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and get treated for

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problem. Most

people

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who are under

depression

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refuse to see

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doctor

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case

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someone from family or friends should convince the person to see

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doctor

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and

takem

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take

them to see one. For those

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who

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have

control

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food

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intake must be taken care

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their friends or family. In

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we have seen various reasons

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overeating

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as no controlled

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, clinical

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and addiction, and discussed various

solution

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solutions

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consulting a

dietetion

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dietitian

for

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diet

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plan

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taking

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and seeking

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help

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from

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doctor

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a doctor

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in case of

depression

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Phaneendra

Feb 16, 2023

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Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

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Grammatical Range: 4.0

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new research has shown that overeating has a bigger problem than hunger, what are the reasons for this problem? how can it be solved?

Your opinion

“In spite of the advances made in agriculture, many people around the world still go hungry. Why is this the case? What can be done about this problem?

As countries develop, their populations tend to live individually or in small family units. What are the causes of this trend? Is this a positive or negative development?

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Teachers are not as important as they used to be because of the choice of other alternatives for students, such as online teaching. To what extent to do you agree of disagree?

In some countries, fast food restaurants and supermarket is going money to schools to promote their products. Discuss both views and give your opinion.