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International travel is becoming cheaper and more and more countries open their doors for more tourists. Do the advantage of the increased tourism outweigh it's disadvantages?

#travel #countries #doors #tourists #advantage #tourism
There might be contentious debates regarding the issue of whether it is advantageous to
increase
 international travel or not. The opponent could disagree with my stand.
However
, I strongly believe that
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 trip has much more merits than its demerits. In
this
 regard, I will write
this
 essay to elucidate my
opinion
. On the one hand, international travel has several disadvantages, and there are two grounds to underpin
this
opinion
. First of all, the
increase
 of international tourists could destroy nature and many
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peroperties
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properties
.
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, In Greek, there are various kinds of
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peroperties
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properties
 and relics, when many visitors go on a trip to attractions, they could throw trash and litter away
to
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culture
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 sites, and touch them,
it
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lead
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 to
demaging
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damaging
 to them.
Furthermore
, nowadays,
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 of abroad travelers could lead to
spreading
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deseases
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diseases
such
 as Corona Virus, and so on. As far as the other
opinion
 is concerned, there are many merits to
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international travel.
this
 perspective should
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 emphasized, and there are more compelling rationales. the primary reason is that exchanging
of
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people
 all
of
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over
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 the
world
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 can lead to economic merits, namely, many
counries
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countries
 are making efforts to obtain numbers of profits,
increase
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 of foreign
traveller
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 can earn
much
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money from those countries of view.
Moreover
, on
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 of
people
,
people
 can experience diverse activities,
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 helps
people
 have good experiences. Pondering
on
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the
aformentioned
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aforementioned
 statement, it is more reasonable to take
latter
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 view as the
estamblished
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established
opinion
.
Therefore
,
the
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increased tourism should be deemed more profitable. In conclusion,
Although
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increased tourism could have some disadvantages, I am of
opinion
 that it has considerable implications for society.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • economic boost
  • local businesses
  • employment generation
  • government revenue
  • cultural exchange
  • global cooperation
  • infrastructure development
  • transport facilities
  • environmental impact
  • pollution
  • natural habitats
  • carbon footprint
  • overcrowding
  • local resources
  • cost of living
  • cultural erosion
  • traditional values
  • customs
  • tourist sites
  • sustainable tourism
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