Nowadays tourism has great impact on society. Do you agree or disagree.

In
current
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era,
the
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society
get
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gets
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great
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a great
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crash from the
traveler
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traveller
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in life. I do agree because
the
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tourism
bring
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brings
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a lot of money when they visit some destinations, and
also
the
community
can get new
knowladge
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knowledge
of
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about
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visitors. The visitors
want
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visit a destination, and
definetly
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definitely
bring
much
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apply
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money for buying some needs of the
saller
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seller
caller
.
That is
because, if the
traveler
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traveller
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want
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wants
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to survive in
a places
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places
a place
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, they should buy a
needs
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need
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in the local market.
Moreover
, the
societ
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society
definetly
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definitely
sell
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sells
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a necessity
to
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for
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the
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tourism
, and if the
community
get great income it can help in
they
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the
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life.
For example
, In
Bali
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,Bali
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there
are
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is
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many
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tourism
from different countries, and the local
community
know that there is a bullet for increasing daily income.
Therefore
, the local public
build
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a market, and they sell several interesting
need
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needs
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such
as
,
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apply
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traditional food,
local
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and local
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accomodation
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accommodation
. It can make
the
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tourism
feel useful for their
surviving
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survival
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in the places.
The society
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Society
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could get many
comperessions
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compressions
compression
of the
traveler
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traveller
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when they communicate with each other.
That is
to say,
the
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tourism
has a lot of
differents
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different
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knowladge
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knowledge
and
culture
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cultures
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. If
between
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apply
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traveler
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travelers
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and
tourism
transfer something, it might
can
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make their
usderstanding
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understanding
with
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of
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each other.
For instance
, In Indonesia be one of
best
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the best
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destination to visit for people because in there is many
destiantion
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destination
destinations
, so the public could get new
knowladge
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knowledge
from
the
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apply
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tourism
, and they can exchange some cultures,
knowladges
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knowledge
knowledges
or information.
To sum up
, there
are
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is
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great positive impact
to
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on
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public
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the public
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when the
traveler
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traveller
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overtake
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overtakes
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the places. Where possible, between
traveler
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traveller
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and
community
should give a
provit
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profit
for improving
team work
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teamwork
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, and
also
give feeling comfortable to the
tourism
.
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