modern lifestyles mean that many parents have little time for their children .many children suffer because they donnot get as much attention from their parents as children did in the past. Do you agree or disagree?

In
this
modern era, people are running with hectic schedules.
Therefore
, people have less time for
children
.
As a result
,
children
suffer from mental problems, they are not able to get attention from their
parents
compared to the past year. In
this
essay, I will elaborate on more details and
thus
lead to a logical conclusion. First of all,
children
are facing so many difficulties in their environment, and they are able to share the routine life with their
parents
. It increases the gaps between
parents
and
children
.
Furthermore
,
children
are getting low grades in the academic records because there's no help from
parents
to clear their doubts.
In addition
,
parents
don't even have time to attend the annual events.
According to
a recent survey conducted by BBC Channel, more than 40% of
children
complain about their parent's attention.
Nevertheless
, it is evidently clear that
the
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the needed love and attention to
offsprings
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plays a major role in their emotional development; it helps them significantly to be healthy adults down the road.To illustrate, teenagers strive to care and benevolence more than materialistic items for their emotional
well being
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.
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,
this
has
scientifically
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proven by
a
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research conducted by Cambridge University which emphasizes the fact that successful and wealthy people have caring
parents
who kept an eye on them.
Thus
, they grow up confident and secure. In conclusion, in
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light of what
have
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been discussed above.
However
,
parents
have too much responsibility, they should not ignore their
offsprings'
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desires and they have to strike a balance between their personal and practical life
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