The diagram illustrates how bees produce honey. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The process diagram below illustrates the steps involved in honey production by bees
At
first,
bees add Linking Words
cells
to beehives, after that they fly to different flowers to collect the nectar.After enough nectar is collected from different flowers and plants,they fly back to their hives.The next step in honey preparation is the addition of nectars to individual Use synonyms
cells
.
The second stage of honeymaking involves bees flying over the Use synonyms
cells
to create air.,Use synonyms
Subsequently
the water rises from the Linking Words
cells
.Use synonyms
Finally
honey is ready to be taken out from the hives by beekeepers ready for consumption.Linking Words
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