some people use socialmedia to keep in touch with others and new events do you think advantages this techniques outweight the dis advantages

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myriads of miracles . Social
media
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is
a
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one among them , it is
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best alternative to be in touch with everyone even
at
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those at
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the opposite pole of the globe .In my opinion , ample
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pros
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the pros
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that social
media
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have are
outwieghing
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outweighing
the cons . Social
media
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a
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innumerable benefits .
Firstly
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, it
enable
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the users to get in touch with their relatives ,
freinds
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friends
etcetera via audio calls
as well as
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video calls on facetime , Skype , Snapchat and many other platforms . It helps
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immigrants who are far away from their families by coping
up
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with homesickness .
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,
according to
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research
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the research
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of
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New York University ,
due to
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various social
media
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apps ,
the
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90% of people
are
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recovering from depression and anxiety
who
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are living far away from their homes only because they are in connection with their parents via social
media
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.
Secondly
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, it lowers not only the commuting costs but
also
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save
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traveling
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travelling
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time , because in ancient times people had to travel to look
their
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loved ones but now they are only one call away from each
others
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other
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.
Last
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but not least perk of social
media
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, it
enable
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the viewers to know about the incidents and information of
whole
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the whole
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world by just scrolling
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through facebook
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facebook
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Facebook
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or
instagram
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Instagram
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etecetera
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etcetera
.
Furthermore
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, one can share their posts and pictures with anyone . Every good thing
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dark
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side ,
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likewise
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social
media
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is disadvantageous in some ways , first and foremost it promotes
the
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sedantary
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sedentary
lifestyles , ultimately
gives
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birth to many health ailments
such
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as obesity , weak eyesight and depression and so on .
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, it reduces
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in person
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in-person
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meetings by giving preference to virtual meetings .
Consequently
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, it
effects
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the
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body language and social
ettiquetes
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etiquettes
etiquette
,because everyone prefers to talk by phone
instead
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of meeting face to face .
To conclude
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, social
media
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have certain drawbacks but its benefits can not be ignored . It
ease
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the survival of people by providing them with
lot
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a lot
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of features like
audio visual
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audio-visual
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calls and sharing videos and pictures
in
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apply
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between them .
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