Computers are being used more and more in education. Some people say that this is a positive trend, while others argue that it is leading to negative consequences. Discuss both sides of this argument and then give your own opinion.

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Today, it is a common belief that
computers
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are being more and more in education, whilst some think
that is
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leading to negative consequences. I prefer
,
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apply

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that
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computer
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computers

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will
use
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in education,
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however
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however,

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it is more useful and
this
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is a positive trend. To illustrate
computers
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suitable
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are suitable

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for
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Use synonyms

It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.

use
Wrong verb form
using

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your necessary thing it is comfortable, faster,
Correct word choice
and

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easy.
This
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essay will examine both sides.
On the other
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hand
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hand,

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computers
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has
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have

The singular verb has does not appear to agree with the plural subject computers. Consider changing the verb form for subject-verb agreement.

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been provided
a
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with a

It appears that you are missing a preposition with the verb provided. Consider adding the preposition.

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pile of information, valuable education, news, different videos, and music to compare in
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Use synonyms

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Use synonyms

It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.

computer
Add an article
the computer

The noun phrase computer seems to be missing a determiner before it. Consider adding an article.

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should teach play the guitar and learn some other languages,
available
Correct word choice
and available

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information about other cultures. If the weather is cold and you are
teacher
Correct article usage
a teacher

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also
Rephrase
apply

There may be an adverb issue here.

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minus 25
people
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would spend
lesson
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lessons

It seems that lesson may not agree in number with other words in this phrase.

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online format may be
zoom
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Zoom

The word zoom should be capitalized in this context.

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,
whatsapp
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WhatsApp

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,
facebook
Correct word choice
or facebook

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. I prefer will live modern and should
be
Unnecessary verb
apply

The verb be appears to be unnecessary here.

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meet modern requirements because nowadays it is
trend
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a trend
the trend

The noun phrase trend seems to be missing a determiner before it. Consider adding an article.

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.
On the other
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hand
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hand,

It appears that you are missing a comma after the introductory phrase On the other hand. Consider adding a comma.

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others argue that it
is leading
Wrong verb form
leads

It appears that your sentence or clause uses an incorrect form of the verb is leading. Consider changing it.

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to negative consequences reason behind
this
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is that If
chilndren
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children

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or teenagers
had been
Verb problem
apply

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used
Wrong verb form
use

It appears that your sentence or clause uses an incorrect form of the verb used. Consider changing it.

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Use synonyms

It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.

Use synonyms

It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.

computer
Fix the agreement mistake
computers

It seems that computer may not agree in number with other words in this phrase.

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from
Change preposition
for

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negative sights
for instance
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used 3 or 4 times a day
there
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they

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will
be
Verb problem
have

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poor eyesight, and think slowly,
there
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they

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will be lazy and does not succed. Scientists said
,
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apply

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if
Correct word choice
that if

It seems that conjunction use may be incorrect here.

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children from 3 years will
use
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mobile
phone
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phones

It seems that phone may not agree in number with other words in this phrase.

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namely children can not speak
and
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apply

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leading to negative
consequence
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consequences

It seems that consequence may not agree in number with other words in this phrase.

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. Scientists prefer children
does
Unnecessary verb
apply

The verb does appears to be unnecessary here.

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not
use
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it during
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during
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until

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3 years old. In conclusion
people
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will
use
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computers
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positive
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for positive

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sights since
it
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they

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will
be change
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change

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your
life
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lives

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better than
the
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in the

It seems that preposition use may be incorrect here.

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past
in particular
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Usage of linking words is important in IELTS writing. They help create clear connections between ideas in your writing. They improve the flow of your essay by showing relationships between paragraphs and sentences. Using appropriate linking words demonstrates your ability to write cohesively and will help you achieve a higher band score.

people
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always will know about
news
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the news

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, live modern requirements.
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Use synonyms

It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.

Use synonyms

It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.

Computer
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The computer

The noun phrase Computer seems to be missing a determiner before it. Consider adding an article.

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will
use
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an
Correct the article-noun agreement
apply

The indefinite article an may not be required with the plural noun minutes in this sentence. Consider removing the article, or changing the noun to singular.

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hour or quarter
minutes
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of minutes

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.
Who
Correct pronoun usage
Those who

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lives
Correct subject-verb agreement
live

It seems that the verb lives does not agree with the subject. Consider changing the verb form.

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correclty
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correctly

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that
people
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reached
Wrong verb form
reach

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your
Correct pronoun usage
their

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achievment
Correct your spelling
achievement

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will be successful and be educated, conscientious,
and
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apply

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generous, industrious.
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