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Computers are being used more and more in education. Some people say that this is a positive trend, while others argue that it is leading to negative consequences. Discuss both sides of this argument and then give your own opinion.

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Today, it is a common belief that
computers
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 are being more and more in education, whilst some think
that is
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 leading to negative consequences. I prefer
,
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 that
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computer
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computers
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will
use
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 in education,
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however
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however,
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 it is more useful and
this
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 is a positive trend. To illustrate
computers
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suitable
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are suitable
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 for
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use
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using
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 your necessary thing it is comfortable, faster,
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and
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easy.
This
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 essay will examine both sides.
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hand
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computers
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has
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have
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 been provided
a
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with a
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pile of information, valuable education, news, different videos, and music to compare in
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computer
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the computer
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 should teach play the guitar and learn some other languages,
available
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and available
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 information about other cultures. If the weather is cold and you are
teacher
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a teacher
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also
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apply
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minus 25
people
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 would spend
lesson
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lessons
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online format may be
zoom
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,
whatsapp
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WhatsApp
,
facebook
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or facebook
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. I prefer will live modern and should
be
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meet modern requirements because nowadays it is
trend
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a trend
the trend
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.
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hand
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hand,
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 others argue that it
is leading
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leads
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 to negative consequences reason behind
this
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 is that If
chilndren
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children
 or teenagers
had been
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used
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use
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computer
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computers
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from
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for
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 negative sights
for instance
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 used 3 or 4 times a day
there
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they
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 will
be
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have
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 poor eyesight, and think slowly,
there
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they
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 will be lazy and does not succed. Scientists said
,
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apply
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if
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that if
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 children from 3 years will
use
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 mobile
phone
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phones
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 namely children can not speak
and
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apply
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leading to negative
consequence
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consequences
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. Scientists prefer children
does
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not
use
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it during
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during
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until
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 3 years old. In conclusion
people
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use
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computers
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positive
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for positive
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 sights since
it
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they
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 will
be change
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change
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 your
life
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lives
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 better than
the
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in the
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 past
in particular
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people
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 always will know about
news
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the news
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, live modern requirements.
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Computer
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The computer
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 will
use
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an
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apply
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hour or quarter
minutes
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of minutes
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.
Who
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Those who
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lives
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live
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correclty
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correctly
 that
people
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reached
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reach
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your
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their
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achievment
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achievement
 will be successful and be educated, conscientious,
and
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apply
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generous, industrious.

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Structure your answers in logical paragraphs

The easiest way to score well on the IELTS Task 2 writing portion is to structure your writing in a solid essay format.

A strong argument essay structure can be split up into 4 paragraphs, each containing 4 sentences (except the conclusion paragraph, which only contains 3 sentences).

Stick to this essay structure:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion

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