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The issue of gay marriage remains controversial. Some people think that this trend has adverse effects on the society while others believe that it is seen as a natural trend and right for people to choose this type of marriage. Should gay marriage be legal?

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It is indeed that the trend of homosexuality is still being argued nowadays. Some believe that notion can bring some drawbacks to the community
while
 others argue that it is a natural tendency and people are free to decide their relationship orientation. In
this
 essay, I will elaborate on why gay
marriage
 should be illegal. First and foremost, it is unarguable that homosexuality is the main reason behind the invention of some sexually transmitted diseases
such
 as HIV. If the notion of gay
marriage
 is allowable in society, it can increase the
number
 of HIV or other STD cases. There is a medical survey In a certain country that already permits same-sex
marriage
, which results that the
number
 of people diagnosed with HIV is higher compared to the country who still against gay
marriage
.
Furthermore
, gay
marriage
 will cause a decline in the
number
 of birth, and if
this
 notion is legalized there is a massive downward in the population in the future. In some countries, a decline in the
number
 of children is already emerging,
moreover
, if
this
 trend continuously gains permitted by the government it can unconsciously influence other people with a heterosexual orientation which in the future can put the population of humans under the strain of extinction. In conclusion,
although
 choosing relationship orientation is a right for every human being, the legalization of gay
marriage
 can bring some demerits to society
such
 as spreading particular diseases, and
moreover
 can threaten the future with the depletion of the population.
Therefore
, I believe same-sex
marriage
 should not be allowable in
the
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