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Currently there is a trend towards the use of alternative forms of medicine. However, at best these methods are ineffective, and at worst they may be dangerous. To what extent do you agree with this statement? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own experience or knowledge.

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Medicine is changing rapidly, and new forms of treatment have been rising.
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,
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 some
effects
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 of the different
medication
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medications
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 are not known, some has shown very
effective
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. In
this
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essay
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 I will expose my thoughts about new kinds of treatment and
it’s
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its
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effects
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.
The society
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Society
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 is passing through a
sirious
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serious
 situation for the
last
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 3 years regarding
Covid
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. The
Covid
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 virus has mutated
in
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 some new different forms, and each form has its own kind of vaccine. As
son
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soon
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 as, it was discovered a vaccine the population was
relived
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,
besides
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 it was not
comproved
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comprised
improved
eficiente
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efficient
,
people
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so people
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 started to take it and started to be protected. With time it was possible to see that those
alternative
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 vaccines
was
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 creating immunity, and
helped
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 to stop the spread of
Covid
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.
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, there is a great effort of the
the
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community to bring up new ideas to
erradicate
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eradicate
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 disease, some are actually dangerous for health.
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,
in
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 the beginning of the
pandemic
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 some institutions tried to prescript
alternative
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 medicine
such
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 as
vermifugs
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vermifuge
vermifuges
 for the treatment of
Covid
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. There were some cases where doctors had no idea of the collateral
effects
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,
and
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even if they prescripted these kinds of methods. Some of those who experienced
this
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alternative
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 medicine were brought bad
effects
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, and are still suffering the consequences of
a
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medication not truly tested. In conclusion,
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alternative
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the alternative
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 drug is needed in some situations of new diseases. I agree with the fact that some methods are not tested really well and are already in use
of
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 the population, but in
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this
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these
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case
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cases
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 Society must know
it’s
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its
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 consequences.
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