Some countries import a large amount of food from other parts of the world. To what extent is this a positive or negative trend?
Nowadays, the advancement of transportation makes a
possibility
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possible
for transporting
Change preposition
to transport
food
from other countries. Therefore
, many nations try to import foreign dishes massively, while
I assume that it will cause some negative effects on the local societies.
To begin
with, the increase in imported cuisines could generate a significant decrease in the demand for local food
since citizens believe that international foods are more modern rather
than their local Rephrase
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food
. Because of that, the inhabitants have a tendency to spend their money on buying foreign meals, leading economic conditions to be unstable because the national money could not rotate in this
sector. Moreover
, native employees who work in the food
sector will be impacted by this
situation, and resulted in their occupations will be lost. For instance
, Indonesia is an agricultural country who have an abundance of spices, while
the local inhabitants assume that spices are very traditional in this
era and prefer to consume imported vegetables. This
condition affects the indigenous farmers losing their jobs, and causing social and economic problems.
In addition
, because the country imports a large amount of international food
leads the citizens do have not a high level of nationality because they are provided with many options for foreign food
. Thus
, native food
will be threatened by foreign meals, becoming unpopular and not attractive, whereas
local dishes are a part of the indigenous cultures. Furthermore
, if people tend to choose a foreign dish, they will lose their national identity which will impact the diversity of traditions. For example
, World Records released Rendang as the most popular meal in Indonesia in 2015, although
due to
globalization, the government import
a lot of snacks from Korea, and Rendang was replaced by Korean foods in 2021, becoming the best-selling dish in Indonesia.
Wrong verb form
imported
To sum up
, foreign cuisines could affect negatively local people since it makes the nationality of the inhabitants decline significantly and brings social and economic issues for the country. If possible the government should be involved to prevent those effects and try to promote their local meals at the international level.Submitted by muh.yassirullah on
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