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shops should not be allowed to sell any foods or drinks that have been scientifically proven to be bad for people's health

#shops #foods #drinks #people #health
Commercial
stores
 that have perishable items consisting of chemicals have to stop selling to the consumer, especially if it is proven by the experts that it will cause
people
's
health
 in danger. In
this
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 we will discuss the importance of economics and
people
’s
health
, as most of us blame the national
government
 for what is happening in our surroundings, These past few years, junk food has been very famous in all small
stores
, especially for children. They find it mouth watery to eat.
However
, these kinds of
products
 have some chemicals that are not good for your body, but
stores
 keep on selling for profit. The
government
 cannot ban it as it will help them to grow,
for example
, cigarettes and alcohol. Consumers are fully aware that consuming them is a danger to their
health
, yet we are still patronizing these
products
.
Although
 the
government
 and store owners are aware of the causes,
this
 company couldn’t stop supplying them as they are one of the highest
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 to profit. The
government
 can only warn the
people
 about the disadvantages that it will cause to their
health
. Moving forward, it will always depend on
the
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people
how
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 they will live. Discipline is always the key to everything. We cannot stop commercial
stores
selling
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 some
products
 that are prohibited as they only want to make a profit and live their lives.
Moreover
,
costumers
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customers
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 have the power to choose and stop purchasing these kinds of
products
. In conclusion, national governments are looking for possibilities and seeing
to
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 way options for everything, not only for
economy
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the economy
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 but for
people
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health
 and safety. Our contribution is to be open-minded and make the right choice.
In addition
, if no one is buying these prohibited items, for sure it will stop producing and selling in all the markets.
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