Many believe that modern technology has brought people together, but others say that it has driven us apart. Discuss both viewpoints and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge and experience.

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modern
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on our communication
skills
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talked about
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and our personal
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modern
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assistance us to contact
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us closer
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our community
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people
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us to share
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together.
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although
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modern
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on our society.
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time to use it and engage with real
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our communication
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Topic Vocabulary:
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  • communicate
  • social media
  • virtual meetings
  • global community
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  • distract
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  • digital divide
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