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International travel is becoming cheaper and cheaper, and more countries are now opening their doors to foreign visitors. Do you think that the advantages of this trend outweigh the disadvantages?

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Nowadays, travelling around the world is becoming more and more popular because of the low prices.
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, in my opinion, there are more cons than pros of
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, the
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 is getting worse, the culture slowly disappears and the people in the tourist branch have long working days for a bad salary. I will now explain my arguments in detail in the following paragraphs. To start with
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,
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 has a big effect on our life quality. Touriststourists travel often by plane or car to their destination. When they enter the country, they often hire a taxi or drive around to go to tourist attractions.
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, they make a mess at the places they visit.
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, the popular city of Rome was ultra-clean during the pandemic.
Tourists
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 ensure
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 by their way of behaving. Another reason is that
tourists
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 have a big effect on the culture of a society.
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, in almost all of the retail shops in Amsterdam, English is the native language. It is beginning to look like the residents are becoming the new
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 in their own country. Proponents argue that because of
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 there are a lot of jobs. I have to agree with that,
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, the employees have to work long days and do not get paid well. The money goes to the owners of the company who make a big profit. Unfortunately,
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 generally benefits the people who already live
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wealthy life.
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, the advantages of
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 do not outweigh the disadvantages. The
pollution
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 is increasing, the culture will slowly disappear and
tourism
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 does not benefit the local people.
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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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