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with increase in global tourism it has become obvious that there are many advantages and disadvantages that can be found from the effects of tourism. do you believe advantages outweigh disadvantages?

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Humans are free spirits and social beings and they can not live without travelling and interacting with each other. With the help of globalization and the internet nowadays, travelling has been so much cheaper and safer, and
as a result
, we face an enormous explosion in the number of people travelling the world.
However
, the rising number of
tourists
 has some advantages and disadvantages. In
this
 essay, we will discuss some of them. First and the most important benefit of global and local
tourism
 is financial.
Tourists
 tend to spend a vast amount of money without planning carefully. And
due to
 exchange rates, it is very profitable for the local economy.
Secondly
, another advantage of
tourism
 is culture. Travelling and
tourism
 help people to learn and observe new cultures and gain new knowledge, which is very effective for both the hosting country and the travellers.
On the other hand
, there are some drawbacks to
this
 idea. The main disadvantage is environmental damage to nature. The aviation industry has improved a lot since the past decade which has made travelling easier, but aeroplanes make a lot of damage to air quality and cause global warming. The second con is cultural shifts. Sometimes
tourists
 have a bad influence on local people and it is hard for locals to adopt and absorb new behaviours.
To conclude
, In my opinion,
Tourism
 and global travel have many advantages and the pros outweigh the cons on one condition If
tourism
 laws and policies are made correctly.
therefore
 if somehow we were able to execute and regulate the
tourism
 laws, we can benefit a lot from the effects of international and local
tourists
.
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