Everyone should become vegetarian because they do not need to eat meat to have a healthy diet. Do you agree or disagree?

As we know,One of the most controversial issues around the world is health. Meanwhile,some people believe,to have a healthy body everyone should be vegetarian.I can neither completely agree nor disagree with
this
statement.because there are several merit and demerit
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both views with some examples. It is well-established fact that our bodies need some
nutritions
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to be healthy and stable.vegetables and plants first of all,help our bodies feel
more
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fresh and lively.vegetables have
also
many minerals and vitamins and they are full of water that they are not only suitable for bodies but
also
they are useful for skins.
in addition
, vegetarians can gain protein and
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from some plants
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for example
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bean
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,
pea
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and soybean.
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vegetarians typically have
healthy
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diet
because their
diet
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low in fat .and
it
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reduce the risk of heart attacks and it is one of the best way
control
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weight and obesity.
On the other hand
,nutritionists recommend people should eat
meat
and vegetable equally.first and foremost,our body
require
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protein and supplement to build muscles that they are only in
meat
and animal products
such
as milk or egg.
secondly
, we need some kinds of
meat
such
as beef,lamb,chicken or fish which
they
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are full of valuable and vital ingredients that
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are necessary to have a healthy body and sound physical structure.
Besides
,some researches demonstrate
meat
eaters are more energetic and active.
To sum up
,In my perspective,with
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of
meat
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both of them to our daily routine
diet
we can gain the desired result.
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