You have got one week break from your office and you want to go on a trip with your uncle as you both like adventurous activities. Write an email to your uncle to ask to go on a trip with you. Write an email to your uncle in about 150-200 words. Your email should do the following things: •Where and when you want to go •What you can do there •Why do you want to go with your uncle only?
Dear Uncle,
I hope you are in radiant health and in the best of spirits. I am writing
this
email to express my enthusiasm about the upcoming excursion that we have been planning since long ago. Finally
, I managed some time from my hectic work schedule. However
, you would be elated to hear that I got a one-week break, so having plenty of time, we can arrange the trip better.
To begin
with, I have finalized the vacation's destination at Niagra on the Lake and we can start the journey on the 27th, of May around 8: 30am in morning as well as
I have cut two Go-train tickets, and after reaching the station, we have to take an Uber to arrive at our destination.
Moreover
, I have selected Niagra not only for its charismatic beauty but also
for the plethora of activities we can do there. More elaborately, we can ride the ship to feel the Niagra fall more closely, apart from
this
we can ride the cable car, and also
enjoy a lot of indoor games.
Further
to this
, I can't imagine other companions than you, as we both share the same vibes. Apart from
this
, being an employee in a travel agency, you have intense experiences with accommodation and the ability manage to sightseeing more concisely.
I can not resist myself to start a new adventure with you. Let me know, if you have any other suggestions for me. I am looking forward to hearing from you.
Your loving Nicec,
LisaSubmitted by Lisa Bhuiyan on
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General
Remember to proofread your email for small typos or errors, such as 'Niagra' which should be spelled 'Niagara', and 'Nicec' which seems to be a typo for 'Niece'. Attention to detail enhances the overall quality of your message.
Coherence and Cohesion
Consider more varied sentence structures to enhance readability and interest. While your sentences are clear, variation in structure can add a dynamic flair to your writing.
Task Achievement
While your email is engaging and well-structured, incorporating a more direct conclusion or sign-off could enhance its effectiveness. A concluding sentence reiterating your anticipation or a summary of your plans could bring a strong closure to your message.
Tone
Your opening and closing greetings are friendly and appropriate, setting a positive tone for your email.
Task Achievement
You clearly conveyed the purpose of your email, outlined the proposed trip details, and explained your reasons for wanting to go with your uncle, meeting the task's requirements efficiently.
Coherence and Cohesion
The logical flow from introduction, providing trip details, to explaining your personal reasons for choosing your uncle as a companion demonstrates good coherence and cohesion.
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