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some people say that that adversiting is extremely successful at persuading us to buy things.other people think that advertining is so common that we no longer pay attention to it. Discuss both views and give your opinoin

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some
people
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 that
advertisements
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 have a significant impact on our tendency for purchasing various
types
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 of
goods
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 in our daily lives.
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, others deny the power of
advertisements
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 since we are used to them.
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, it may be true that
advertisements
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 can not tempt many families to purchase commodities,but I believe they are crucial for the current market.
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, compared to the
last
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 decades, the role of advertisement became quite comprehensive globally. It is undeniable that introducing products through social media is an essential part of the business
along with
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 developing the quality of products. For
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instant,
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 well-known brands in various
types
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 of
goods
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 namely fashion brands
such
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 as GUCCI or FENDY are already known among
people
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 worldwide, they invest in their brand by paying huge amounts of money to famous actors or actresses or sports champions to conserve their success among public mindset and following that pursuing
people
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 to buy their
goods
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.
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, the creation of new careers like influencers through social media and applications
such
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 as Instagram clarifies the vital role of adverting in our global village. For ,example famous influencers have noticeable income from producers and sellers to present their commodities on their pages.
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 the majority of
people
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 believe in the importance of advertisement, exploding societies with avast
types
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 of
advertisements
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 regardless of our real lives
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 as streets shops different organisations or virtual
types
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 like social networks especially after being familiar with the internet might cause a disturbance object in our lives,
thus
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 many
people
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 try to ignore them.
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, a full inbox of commercial messages can not tempt the community to purchase anything and even can hind them to shop.
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, some exaggerated or false information is displayed for the purpose of fooling
people
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 to purchase useless objects causes lake of confidence in producers or merchants in communities. Namely, online shops are showing products with high quality and make a perfect image at low cost to buyers
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 they may not get the same of it.
To conclude
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,
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 it is believed by some
people
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 that presenting
goods
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 via the correct method through media or any other introducers, is essential to tempt the population to buy
goods
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, others disagree.
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 l feel that both ideas are correct to some extent and partially think
advertisements
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 still are strong tools for catching
people
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’s eyes.

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