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People say that success is 10 percent talent and 90 percent hard work. Do you agree or disagree? Give your opinion.

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There are some debates about
success
 and failure. Some people believe that
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 being successful is all about hard
work
while
 others prioritize the
talent
 of the successful person. I personally agree that
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 the principal cause of
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success
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 is hard
work
 and dedication. The following essay would explore
both
 points and provide a personal opinion.
To begin
 with, it is said that, practice makes a man perfect. So, those people who succeed in life are obviously by their hard
work
 and perseverance. Being successful and a role model for others is not an easy task. A lot of contribution is required to reach
this
 level.
For example
, every successful person in
this
 world has an inspiring story which motivates them towards
success
. If we look
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the people who succeed in life are definitely carrying hardworking and positive minds. They are the blend of
talent
 and dedication together to survive in
this
 world.
However
, it would be fragile if we try to ignore
talent
 in the case of
success
. There was a common proverb that, there is 1
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 of
talent
 against 99
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 of hard
work
. We cannot ignore that side
however
, the born
talent
 requires nurturing which can be achieved through hard
work
.
Moreover
, those who are not talented can succeed through hard
work
 and
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 in themselves. So in the case of
success
, we should keep in mind
both
.
Both
talent
 and hard
work
 are responsible for being successful. In conclusion, I can come to the point that, being successful is not an easy task
however
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, we should not ignore the importance of
talent
 and
hardwork
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hard work
both
.
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