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It is generally believed that some people are born with certain talents, for instance for sports or music, and others are not. However, it is sometimes claimed that any child can be taught to become a good sports person or musician.

#people #talents #sports #music #child #person #musician
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person is ingenious
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whether every
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 child can be instructed for being
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 in a particular area. In my opinion, through practice and determination, any child can become a successful artist or sportsperson. On the one hand, it is believed that some people are gifted and naturally they are
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an expert
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expert
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experts
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 like playing musical instruments or maybe solving
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 cube.
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, a 3
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 old baby swimming in a pool like a professional. If in a society there are 100 babies, it will be heard that only two or three babies
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a gift
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gift
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 from
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God. But people may think that
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 notability he can achieve his aim. But
unfortunately
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 it is totally wrong. Without proper
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 he could be distracted from his own track. In order to achieve
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 they have to hone their skills like everyone else. It is just that achieving success is relatively easier for them.
On the other hand
, if any child wants to be a perfect athlete and from
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stage
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 he is trained
as well as
 proper practice, definitely he will be a good sportsman.
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 in
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a lots
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 of football
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players
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having
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 some special attributes but doesn't mean by born they have great power. For being a good football player
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the practice a lot
as well as
 get proper training. In conclusion, I completely agree with idea that any
children
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can be talented with proper guidelines ,
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successfully
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person in his career
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • innate abilities
  • genetic make-up
  • inherent aptitude
  • nurturing environment
  • rigorous training
  • proficient
  • initial advantage
  • consistent practice
  • perseverance
  • quality training
  • prodigies
  • dedication
  • long-term success
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