Some people say that advertising is extremely successful at persuading us to buy things. Other people think that advertising is so common that we no longer pay attention to it. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Today, big companies spend a huge part of their total expenditure on marketing. They pay for billboards, e-mail notifications and other places to put their
products
.
Consequently
, many
people
argue that advertising is no more able to persuade us to purchase its
products
. Personally, I do not completely agree with
this
statement. On the one hand, when corporations pay for advertising, their main goal is not to make
people
willed
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to buy things
,
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but to remain
company’s
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the company’s
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or product’s name in our mind.
For instance
, we could recall Red Bull sponsoring all big
sport
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events. They do not expect that
people
who saw their logo will immediately run to stores and buy their energy drinks.
However
, the company knows that if
people
who always see
Red
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Bull sign wanted to buy an energy drink, they would buy
those
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brand
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whose
name
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they knew the best.
On the other hand
, some marketing specialists forget that if their product is too naughty and appears everywhere, some
people
will start hating
and
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never buy it.
For example
, I know that I will never go to a
bet
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company whose advertising I heard hundreds of times watching films
in
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the Internet.
Consequently
, I think that it is very important to find the appropriate balance in marketing
products
. In conclusion, I can assume that advertising still works. If 50 years ago its main purpose was to sell
products
, now companies aim to mention their names wherever they could, so maybe that
it
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is the point of the statement that advertising is too common to sell us something.
However
, it is important not to go
to
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far and not to make
bad
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a bad
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impression on your product.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • persuade
  • promote
  • attract
  • influence
  • impact
  • consumerism
  • commercialism
  • market
  • product
  • brand
  • endorsement
  • manipulative
  • saturated
  • overwhelmed
  • repetitive
  • distracting
  • irrelevant
  • exaggerated
  • misleading
  • desensitized
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