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Topic: The unlimited use of cars may cause many problems. What are those problems? In order to reduce the problems, should we discourage people to use cars?

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Over the past few decades, there are significant growth in technology. It is a common public opinion that-, There are so many problems developed by over usage of
cars
. By demotivating individuals to use
cars
, reduce the problems.
Therefore
,
following
this
 essay will explain the cause, effects, and problems for solutions and will reach a proper conclusion. In contemporary society, every single family has a car. Sale of
cars
 increasing day by day.
People
 consider that-,
cars
 declare the status in society and
also
 it an easy way to reaching in remote areas. But it creates a lot of issues for the environment.
For instance
, each car emitted carbon dioxide which results in global warming. It creates holes in the ozone layer. The ozone layer is like an umbrella, that protects our earth from radiation. So damaging
this
 layer leads to more serious health issues like cancer.
In addition
 to
this
, Another concern is traffic jams in public areas. To cite an example, cities like Bangalore and Delhi have always been trafficked at any time. locals can't reach anywhere on time or they should leave their home early. To some extent, Human beings are responsible for
this
. Precautions have to be taken by the
people
. They should use public transport. It will resolve both issues which I mentioned in the above paragraph. Another problem solution is the usage of electric
cars
. Nowadays, There is an increase in buying electric
cars
. But, some of them are still afraid of buying electric
cars
. Two reasons are there. One is, worrying about safety and another reason is cost. So the Government needs to give awareness programs and classes to the public and
also
 they should reduce the price of electric
cars
.
To conclude
, transportation plays an important role in
people
's life.
Instead
 of discouraging
people
. They need to think of an alternate solution for
this
 Problem. Hopefully,
this
 problem will solve in the future.
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