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jnuSome people say that advertising is extremely successful at persuading us to buy things. Other people think that advertising is so common that we no longer pay attention to it.Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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In today’s world, there has been more and more emphasis on product advertisements. It is acknowledged by certain individuals that using promotion in order to convince
people
 to purchase items is particularly effective. There is an opposing argument,
however
, that it cannot attractively
people
 to buy things.
This
 essay will discuss both sides of the argument in detail and provide my opinion as well. In the modern-cyber era, product advertisement has easier to access in an individual’s life with many varied patterns and
this
 convincing has become excessively popular. A common example is when
people
 are watching a brochure price or seeing a promotion season.
For instance
, on Black Friday is coming, most
people
 need to buy everything discount price from flyers without any consideration even though
this
 thing may not be useful at that time, It provided that the advertising is enormously effective to persuade
people
 to spend money. In spite of an effective means of advertising, there is an opposing argument,
however
, that advertising is very usual that
people
 can ignore it. One example is when advertising comes through everywhere in publicists' life, which leads to disturbing
people
as well as
 making
people
 feel anything may not be special. Indeed, when we are surfing the internet, a lot of advertisements show up on the website’s screen which is result in persons to ignore and pay less attention to them. From my perspective, Using Advertisements is successful and can convince me when I need to buy a thing
that is
 beneficial stuff,
moreover
, if there is more and more advertising. It can make
people
 annoyed and no longer pay attention.
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    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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