Nowadays, a large amount of advertising is aimed at children. Some people think it is negative for children and should be banned. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Children are targeted by loads of advertising nowadays. What is more, some people view
this
phenomenon as harmful and the reasons why I totally agree with them will be provided in
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the kinds of advertising.
Nevertheless
, kids should be protected by being exposed repeatedly
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commercial programs because they are still immature and cannot distinguish which is wrong and which is correct.
For instance
, if youngsters have to see the promotion of chocolates or other sugary desserts whenever they turn on televisions or other devices,
then
they would be tempted to persuade their parents to get them.
Also
, the majority of them do not recognize the snack's nutrition or other potential negative effects.
Thus
, they need to be far away from advertising before becoming mature enough to judge products.
In addition
,
this
trend fosters pupils to form
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habit
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. It can be aroused easily if they keep purchasing stuff
due to
the business strategy which is tricking consumers to make big cash. When children are tied up with the tricks, they are likely to be unaware of the importance of their pocket money and spend it without being considerate.
Furthermore
, the formed
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will be endured for a long time.
For example
, my classmate
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to buy whatever she sees on TV even though she doesn't earn money . And it leads to her parent's trouble and they mentioned that she used to do it since she was far
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younger.
That is
why I think it should be forbidden. In conclusion, advertising has a multitude of significant problems as it is making
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judgment even worse. Not only that, it even creates
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undesirable actions.
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