You live in a room in the college hostel which has severe problems. You would like to move into another room and need your hostel super's permission for that. Write a letter to the hostel super. In your letter, introduce yourself describe the problems explain what type of room you would prefer

Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing to make a request to you regarding my
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I would like to change. I am Rupinder Kaur, who is a third-year student in the master's degree course. I live in
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number 302, which is located on the second floor of the college hostel. Presently, I am experiencing a number of problems in the
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.
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, there is no internet coverage in it.
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, the wall paint is falling off.
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, there is not enough fresh air coming
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poor ventilation. I would appreciate
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you could move me
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another
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. Since the sunlight and fresh air are crucial for well-being, I will be grateful if there are one or two windows.
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, the internet connection should be available so that I
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online platforms for my study. I am looking forward to your positive consideration. Yours faithfully, Rupinder Kaur.

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task response
Task response: You answer all parts of the task, but you can add one short reason for why you need the change soon.
task response
Task response: Your tone is polite and clear, but 'Dear Hostel Super' is better than 'Dear Sir or Madam' because you know the person’s role.
coherence cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: Your letter is easy to follow with a clear start, middle, and end.
coherence cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: You use linking words like 'Firstly', 'Secondly', and 'Moreover' well, but you can also use one short closing line like 'I hope to hear from you soon.'
task response
Task response: You introduce yourself, describe the room problems, and say what room you want.
coherence cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: Each paragraph has one main idea, so the letter is clear and neat.
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