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At the present, the media affects people's lives significantly. What impact does this have on society? it is negative or positive development

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Nowadays,
media
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 is one of the factors that has influenced many aspects of human
life
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.
While
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 many
people
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 shape and create their
idea
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, I believe
this
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 is a negative development because it ruins
people
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's
behavior
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. There is a major impact on
media
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 since it can affect how
people
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 develop their perspective, giving more
information
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 to generate the way
of
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people
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 think.
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 more simply,
media
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 provides more new
information
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 day by day so that most
of
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people
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the people
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 get more values and insights to interpret the
idea
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. Reading and hearing the
information
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 from the
media
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 leads more
people
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 to understand the particular issue.
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, their understanding will improve
capability
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their capability
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 to make and shape the
idea
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.
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, it could be seen,
people
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 actually students who are always exposed to
many
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much
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information
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 from the
media
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 were more
attractive
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 and
creative
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have creative
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 ideas to solve
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the problem
a problem
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problem
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problems
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 in the community.
In contrast
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, the negative development of
media
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 could devastate human
behavior
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behaviour
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, interrupting human
life
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.
This
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 is because
,
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 a large number of
people
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 desire to get more
information
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, so they have spent much time on their devices and making
people
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 rely on their gadgets. What is more, most
of
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apply
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people
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the people
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 search
new
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for new
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information
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 in
media
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,
while
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 spending much time
in
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on
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screen
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the screen
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 has
been
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isolated
people
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 and
interrupting
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interrupted
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 their social
life
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 to interact with others.
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, more population actually in metropolitan cities prefer to spend using their phone all day long rather than
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interacting
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 with
surrounding
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their surrounding
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.
To sum up
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, the
media
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 has
positive
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a positive
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 impact because it could evolve more
people
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 by creating
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an idea
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idea
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ideas
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 and I
also
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 argue it is negative development
due to
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 changing human
life
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behavior
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behaviour
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. Where possible,
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