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At the present, the media affects people's lives significantly. What impact does this have on society? it is negative or positive development

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Nowadays,
media
 is one of the factors that has influenced many aspects of human
life
.
While
 many
people
 shape and create their
idea
, I believe
this
 is a negative development because it ruins
people
's
behavior
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. There is a major impact on
media
 since it can affect how
people
 develop their perspective, giving more
information
 to generate the way
of
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people
 think.
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 more simply,
media
 provides more new
information
 day by day so that most
of
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people
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the people
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 get more values and insights to interpret the
idea
. Reading and hearing the
information
 from the
media
 leads more
people
 to understand the particular issue.
Therefore
, their understanding will improve
capability
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 to make and shape the
idea
.
For instance
, it could be seen,
people
 actually students who are always exposed to
many
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information
 from the
media
 were more
attractive
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 and
creative
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 ideas to solve
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the problem
a problem
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problem
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problems
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 in the community.
In contrast
, the negative development of
media
 could devastate human
behavior
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, interrupting human
life
.
This
 is because
,
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 a large number of
people
 desire to get more
information
, so they have spent much time on their devices and making
people
 rely on their gadgets. What is more, most
of
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people
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the people
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 search
new
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for new
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information
 in
media
,
while
 spending much time
in
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screen
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the screen
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 has
been
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isolated
people
 and
interrupting
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 their social
life
 to interact with others.
For example
, more population actually in metropolitan cities prefer to spend using their phone all day long rather than
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 with
surrounding
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their surrounding
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.
To sum up
, the
media
 has
positive
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 impact because it could evolve more
people
 by creating
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an idea
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idea
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ideas
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 and I
also
 argue it is negative development
due to
 changing human
life
behavior
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behaviour
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. Where possible,
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