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Human activities is damaging the Earth or making it a better place to live? Do you agree or disagree?

#activities #earth #place
There is no denying the fact that the main
impact
 of
human
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humans
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 on
environment
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the environment
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 is debatable.
While
 it is a commonly held belief that individuals may harm the surrounding
environment
.
However
, some people believe that
public
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 has
positive
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a positive
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 effect on the
environment
. From my perspective, I strongly agree that
individuals
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 work may put
a negative effects
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a negative effect
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 on the
environment
. In the forthcoming paragraphs, I shall explain why I believe that human
activieties
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activities
 might
affects
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environment
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the environment
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 negatively. On one hand,
society
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activities
 can negatively affect the
environment
.
For instance
, overpopulation
lead
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 to increase air pollutions which
caused
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 by the use of a high number of cars. To
lllustrate
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illustrate
, burning gasoline fuels contain greenhouse gases that cause climate change. Indeed,
this
 makes it clear that
persons
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activities
 might adversely
impact
 the
environment
.
In addition
, individuals may significantly damage the ecosystem by hunting and fishing.
For example
, a prestigious journal article published that 20 species had disappeared from the
environment
 as
result
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 of hunting and fishing.
Therefore
, the extensive amount of hunting and fishing either for food or sport can
impact
 the food chain as many species started to disappear.
Thus
, it becomes apparent that human
activities
 may strongly harm the
environment
. In conclusion, In my opinion, I consider that community
activities
 can
impact
 the
environment
 negatively
by
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 direct and indirect methods.
This
 is because of the increasing use of vehicles that burns fuels and increases
the
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greenhouse gas emissions.
Furthermore
, hunting and fishing lead to
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a change
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change
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 in
food
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 chain as many species vanished.
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I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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