In some countries, more and more parents begin to teach their children at home rather than send them to school. Do the advantages of this trend outweigh the disadvantages?

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their
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schools
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of
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overshadowing its benefits by stunting the mental and physical growth of a child in many aspects. To commence with , keeping the kids
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home
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study
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of socialism in the
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. To elaborate , in the
schools
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to be social and gregarious .
Furthermore
, sending them to
schools
will help to evolve the sense of co-operation and
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in children , because there they would have to work as a team member or team leader sometimes ,
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would generate
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leadership
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and
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of working in collaboration with others .To
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conducted by New York University in 2019, it was approved that
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children
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to work in teams during
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primary school had 89% leadership qualities to lead any group as a leader . In the contrast , educating them at the
home
would make them unable to evolve all these capabilities in them mentioned above . To explicate , it would
also
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their physical growth not only mental growth ,as in
schools
they are not only focused on academics ,but they
also
give equal priority to sports as well .
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Therefore
, study and sports are going in synchronization in
schools
,
while
at
home
parents
could not able to maintain
this
timetable on the daily basis .
On the other hand
, keeping the
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at
home
will help to make them feel more attached
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their families .To add one more benefit ,
parents
would feel
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safer by seeing their kids studying in front of them rather than sending them to classrooms .
To conclude
, teaching the young ones at
home
will help the
parents
to keep their kids
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more attached
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them ,but we can not ignore the list of demerits of keeping them away from school .Both the aspects ,
parents
and school are predominant for
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development of
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the child
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,mentally and physically as well .
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