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Many museums charge for admission while few others are free. Do the advantages of charging a fee outweigh its disadvantages?

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The entry fees have been introduced by many museums,
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 some of them kept it free to visit. In my opinion, having a visiting charge have way more advantages than its demerits, and I would like to discuss them in the following paragraph. To commence with, collecting a tax to visit any heritage place have many benefits. First of all, the committee can maintain that building without relying on the
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.
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money
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 can be used to maintain those buildings and repair the items.
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this
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, the
government
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 do not need to allocate
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 to
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 sector, if it can run by itself.
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, ministers can use that
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 in other places and provide basic human services in rural areas which are more essential. In one of the articles, it is mentioned that the
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 stopped funding to maintain all the museums in Poland as they become more profitable by taking
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 from their visitors and now are planning to provide help to the nations by providing food to those who fight hunger.
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, some people cannot afford to visit
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 places because of it. They are left with a few choices of places and they end up losing interest in their own history and feel left out in the community.
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, some museums are not in good condition and need maintenance and cannot sustain with the
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's help.
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, It is better to have entry fees in any museum so that administration can use that
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 for the maintenance of the building and can update items on regular basis rather than adding a burden on the ministry to look after it.
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, despite having more advantages
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 notion has a few disadvantages as well.
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