Some people consider sports to be their career in the society. For others it is mostly a work out to stay fit. Discuss both views snd give your opinion

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sport
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is one of
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need
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for
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almost all
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in the world. there are many various sports
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in each country.
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athlete
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consider
sport
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as their career meanwhile others do
sport
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only for their health. in
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disccusion
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percepective
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perspective
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this
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two points of view. sports have become one of the most promising
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in the world. it
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been started since long time ago. many people have decided to become an
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since they were
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kids.
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a football player named
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,
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has played since a really young age and now he is one of the best
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athlete
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in
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this
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era. there are lot
things
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of things
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to consider before people state to become an
athlete
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such
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as training almost
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, injury, a shorter career and many more.
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, athletes have a bigger chance to get injured either
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common or
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injured. most of them
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retired when
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reached their 30s or 40s.
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with people who only work out to stay fit. they spent maybe two or three times a week
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exercise. they mostly spent work on other staff.
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, some of these workers do
sport
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as their hobby. they play football, basketball, cycling,etc only for fun or just to
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times
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with
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.
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sport
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as a career and
do
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sport
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to stay fit are two different things.
by
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deciding to do
sport
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for life means you have to be more serious
on
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it
unlike
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others who do it only for their health or fun. there
is
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also
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some considerations that you need to think
before
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about before
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you decide.
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