Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The extended family (grandparents, cousins, aunts, and uncles) is less important now than it was in the past. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Family forms an integral part of our
lives
. At every turn of our lives
, no one can turn a blind eye to the significant effect of family in our lives
. Therefore
, it is important to consider whether having an extended family is more important or not than it was in the past. In my view, I disagree with the statement that extended family is less important today than it was in the past, mainly for two reasons which I will explain below.
First and foremost, having a big family is a blessing in disguise. We get to learn and understand the importance of the value of life
. Stories narrated by our grandparents will bring forth a change in the perspective of how we live our lives
. For example
, my grandma used to tell me stories of how she used to wake up every morning and go in search of wood so that they can
ignite the fire using them for cooking. They used to walk more than ten miles in search of these woods. But today, with just a turn of the knob, there's fire. Wrong verb form
could
This
and many other stories created a sense of great understanding of how precious our lives
are.
Secondly
, extending family helps us in different situations of life
. They have more knowledge and experience than us. My life
is one example of this
. During my college days, as I was staying away from my parents, I got into an accident and I didn't know what to do. I immediately resorted to calling my uncle, who came as soon as he can
and eventually resolved the matter. The way they interact and behave is far more mature than we can imagine.
In conclusion, I believe having an extended family is a blessing in disguise, as we get to learn many things from their Wrong verb form
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lives
and also
be influenced by their knowledge. Some people may argue that having them around is less important, but I on the other hand
regard them as an integral part of our present life
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Coherence and Cohesion
You have provided a well-structured essay with a clear introduction, body, and conclusion. The logical progression of ideas is evident, but be sure to maintain this coherence throughout the essay.
Task Response
Your essay clearly responds to the prompt with a specific stance and relevant supporting points. Make sure to address any potential counterarguments to further strengthen your argument and fully address the task requirements.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite
