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The table below shows information and predictions regarding the change in percentage of the poplulation age 65 and above in three countries.

The table below shows information and predictions regarding the change in percentage of the poplulation age 65 and above in three countries.
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The table compares the variation in the proportion of elderly people
population
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 rate in
Canada
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 ,
Germany
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 and The
UK
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 and it
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 predicts the
population
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 ratio of 2030 too . Generally speaking , the
population
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 rate of
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age
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 65 and above is going to increase dramatically in all three countries in upcoming years , and
Germany
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 will account the for most . To be specific ,
Germany
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 had the most
population
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 rate in 1988 , with 20% , which was the highest compared to
two
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the two
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 other nations , which
maded
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made
 up 16%
for
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Canada
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 and 14%
for
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UK
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 . In 2000
this
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 rating had some significant changes in two countries ,
Canada
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 and
Germany
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 which rose 16% to 21% and 20% to 25% that year .
Whereas
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 , The
UK
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 had only recorded
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% increase (15%) .
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 it is
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forecasted
 that all three nation going to have almost 5% surge in 2030
comparing
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 to 2000 with 26% for
Canada
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 , 30% for
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 and a fifth for The
UK
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 .
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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