The chart shows the sales of five different kinds of jam from 2009 to 2014
The line chart indicates the
sales
of five different kinds of jam from 2009 to 2014.
Use synonyms
Overall
, it can be seen that all types of jam experienced an upward trend in Linking Words
sales
except for plum during the given years. Use synonyms
In addition
, Linking Words
strawberry
remained the most popular kind with the highest figure in most of the period.
Starting at 3.2 Fix the agreement mistake
strawberries
million
units in 2009, the Use synonyms
sales
of Use synonyms
strawberry
quickly increased and reached a peak of 7 Fix the agreement mistake
strawberries
million
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at the end
of the period. Linking Words
Similarly
, the figures for raspberry and grape witnessed the same pattern in which their Linking Words
sales
grew considerably and stood at 5.5 Use synonyms
million
and 4.5 Use synonyms
million
respectively in 2014.
Moving on, 2.5 Use synonyms
million
units of plum Use synonyms
was
sold in 2009. Correct subject-verb agreement
were
However
, Linking Words
this
number gradually dropped throughout the period and Linking Words
finally
, no unit was recorded in 2014. Regarding cherry, its Linking Words
sales
saw a fluctuation Use synonyms
around
2 Change preposition
of around
million
in the first four years. Use synonyms
Then
, the figure increased slightly before dropping to 2.5 Linking Words
million
in 2014.Use synonyms
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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