The chart shows the sales of five different kinds of jam from 2009 to 2014
The line chart indicates the
sales
of five different kinds of jam from 2009 to 2014.
Overall
, it can be seen that all types of jam experienced an upward trend in sales
except for plum during the given years. In addition
, strawberry
remained the most popular kind with the highest figure in most of the period.
Starting at 3.2 Fix the agreement mistake
strawberries
million
units in 2009, the sales
of strawberry
quickly increased and reached a peak of 7 Fix the agreement mistake
strawberries
million
at the end
of the period. Similarly
, the figures for raspberry and grape witnessed the same pattern in which their sales
grew considerably and stood at 5.5 million
and 4.5 million
respectively in 2014.
Moving on, 2.5 million
units of plum was
sold in 2009. Correct subject-verb agreement
were
However
, this
number gradually dropped throughout the period and finally
, no unit was recorded in 2014. Regarding cherry, its sales
saw a fluctuation around
2 Change preposition
of around
million
in the first four years. Then
, the figure increased slightly before dropping to 2.5 million
in 2014.Submitted by suteekarntipsukoom on
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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