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Some people say that instead of seeing the Internet as a way of opening up new communication possibilities world-wide, we should be concerned about the effect this is having on social interaction. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this view?

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The
internet
 has opened up new methods of communication across the globe.
However
, some
people
 are worried about the impact
this
 is having on our daily lives. Personally, I think the
internet
 has a detrimental effect on how we socially interact. I agree that the
internet
 has improved communication in a number of ways. In the modern age families and friends are spread
world-wide
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. Without the advent of
email
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 it would be extremely difficult to keep in touch with our peers.
For example
, in my own experience, my best friend lives in Canada and without email we would have to converse via expensive international telephone calls or letter writing which in turn would mean no instant messaging and a delay in relaying potentially important information.
Nevertheless
, the effects of the
internet
 have not been entirely positive. Modern forms of interaction mean that many
people
 feel traditional methods of communication,
such
 as letter writing and conversational skills, are being neglected.
This
 may mean a reduction in the ability of
people
 to socially interact with each other.
Also
, the
internet
 can act as an omnipresent distraction.
For example
, always present instant messaging and social media can be a distraction at home or in the office and can draw a user's attention away from interacting with individuals around them. In conclusion, I agree that a number of
people
 should be concerned about the effect the
internet
 is having on our ability to interact with one another and
this
 may be damaging to individuals and society in the future if not addressed.
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