In many cities, planners tend to arrange shops, schools, offices, and homes in specific areas and separate them each other. Do you think the advantages of this policy outweigh the disadvantages.

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Many city planners are in favour of modularization management which relocates all the

shops

, schools, offices, and residents' houses in different areas. In my opinion, the benefits of

this

arrangement cannot overshadow the drawbacks since cities are places with providing essential amenities to support the citizens.

Firstly

, arranging cities by modularization management mode is merely inconvenient for the

people

. From my perspective, it goes against the natural development of human societies where we all live together to support each other. If we locate

shops

, schools, offices and residential areas separately,

people

will have limited access to shop centres which leads to the consequence that medium and small

shops

cannot survive.

In other words

people

living in communities with well-distributed supporting buildings, mean that it can fulfil their basic needs in a single area, which is more convenient and higher efficient.

Secondly

, separating residential complexes from

shops

, schools, and offices can increase the

demands

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for commuting, which will lead to environmental pollution. More precisely, rather than travelling in one area for work and study, all residents have to use public or private vehicles to commute to a different area which means that they use more petrol than usual. It would not be a big problem if there are only five to ten

people

travelling like

this

a day.

However

, what we are alarmed about is the whole city with everyone uses that much petrol to commute at least five days a week.

As a result

, air pollution,

as well as

noise pollution, will be uncontrollable. In conclusion,

although

the centralized management method may have a positive side, I oppose

this

idea as the drawbacks are far more severe than the benefits.

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In many cities, planners tend to arrange shops, schools, offices, and homes in specific areas and separate them each other. Do you think the advantages of this policy outweigh the disadvantages.

Include an introduction and conclusion

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