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It is very clear now that English should be the primary language taught in all schools around the world. Learning a different foreign language before English is, in today's world, a waste of time. Do you agree or disagree with this statement?

#english #language #schools #world #waste #time
Nowadays, it´s a global
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 that
English
 is the best way to communicate and make networking between different world cultures. Actually, in a fast internet access and information era, more than 90% of that information is in
English
, that fact ensures the necessity to learn with high priority
this
 idiom,
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 only in the classrooms,
also
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but also
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 at all levels of
the
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society.
On the other hand
, I agree with the concept that put
English
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 in the first ranking of
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idioms
, that you should learn before coming to adulthood. But if we have
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seriously
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 and specific care about the different
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levels
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 when
interact
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idioms
, we can discover that
English
 is not the only
one
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method to connect
people
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with people
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 and communicate
them
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with them
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.
For example
 in
Meadle
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Middle
 East and Asia, Mandarin and Arabic languages are fully used day by day and
tendence
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tendency
 to increase. Because is a cultural fact that people want not to lose,
on the contrary
, they want to cultivate and grow their idiomatic heritage. Taking
in
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 account the ideas above,
most
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 important
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languages or
idioms
is
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 world comprehension and evolution, among that
evolution
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 are
world´s
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the world´s
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 estimate and respect, having
deserve
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 value over the different countries around our globe and their
variety
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ideologies
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. To
conlcude
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conclude
, I
desagree
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disagree
 with the conception that
estimate
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what
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study
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studying
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differents
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different
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idioms
out
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of
English
 is a waste of time
,
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 because all
idioms
 around the world
has
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different
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 kind of cultural importance,
depend
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 the country and people and deserve all the attention and care, or we lose important legacy.
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