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People today can use internet to learn the life and culture of another country, so it cannot be necessary to travel to other country. To that extend do you agree or disagree?

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These days, every time you turn on the computer or flick through the pages of websites, you learn about the way of other's
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 and traditions. But there is the question of what measure can digital net replace real-world travel. Some
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 believe that in the modern era, travelling is not a necessary thing because we are able to watch the world from blue screens. I completely disagree with
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 idea and in
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, the internet doesn’t show us real
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. What I mean by saying
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 is that most things on the internet are exaggerated and cannot convey emotions.
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, many websites show interesting facts about the
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 of others from the bright corners and down the dark side because the majority of websites purchase commercial profit as a main goal.
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, we see half of the facts. Another reason why I disagree that travelling is not necessary is that numerous details we can’t see on the screen. Take BBC as an example. It shows us one tradition of Chine. But it doesn’t show us how it was founded at the beginning and what was the real reason for establishing
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 among the Chinese
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.
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, there is an argument that the internet can help to search the world for
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 who can’t afford a travelling. Many
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 have the opportunity to learn the basic aspects of the
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 of others.
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, it assists to be rounded as a person. In conclusion, the digital world net cannot evoke emotions and impressions as a real journey. Personally, I think that if a person has the chance to travel to another country it must be done.
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