A friend of yours is thinking of going on a camping holiday for the first time this summer.He/She has asked for your advice. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter Explain why you think your friend would enjoy a camping holiday Describe some possible disadvantages Say whether you would like to go camping with your friend this summer
Dear Sir or Madam
Our city is hot and dry in summer. So our parents send us camping somewhere cool. My
friend
went camping for the first time. He is very interested in what kind of place the camp
is. I told him about the events of the camp
, for example
, when I went last
year, our teachers gave a real car to a boy who read a lot to make the children
happy. My friend
started reading as soon as he heard it and told me he was going to win a car at camp
.
This
year I got sick, so they didn't take me to the camp
, because my illness can be passed on to the children
. I will be admitted to the camp
with a health certificate. Where even young children
are told to clean their rooms. After all, these things are difficult for young children
.
I really want to go camping with my friend
this
summer because my friend
won't make me bored. The camp
is also
very interesting. If we go camping together, we will participate in games and win all kinds of medals because my friend
encourages me with all kinds of words. After hearing these words, my confidence in myself increases and I win in the games.
Yours faithfully,
AfruzaSubmitted by omondavlat91 on
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Understanding and Completing the Task
You need to fully understand the task and ensure your response directly addresses all parts of it. The provided letter veers off-topic by discussing a camp experience unrelated to a camping holiday with nature, tents, etc., as suggested by the task.
Completing the Task
For a higher score in task achievement, make sure your letter directly advises on the pros and cons of camping and a clear expression of whether you'd like to join your friend on a camping holiday, as per the task's requirements.
Structuring Your Letter
Ensure each paragraph is focused on a single idea that is relevant to the task and logically progresses from the introduction, through the body, to the conclusion. This will improve the letter's coherence.
Greeting and Closing
An appropriate greeting and closing are used, but ensure they match the tone and context of the letter. 'Dear Sir or Madam' is typically used for formal letters to an unknown recipient, whereas 'Dear [Friend's Name]' would be more suitable here.
Clarifying and Organizing Ideas
Make your ideas clearer by including examples and explanations that directly relate to the topic of going on a camping holiday. Use paragraphs to organize these ideas logically.
Connecting Ideas
Your letter could significantly benefit from using a variety of sentence structures, connectors, and transition words to link ideas and paragraphs coherently. This would help in achieving a more polished and cohesive text.
The Greeting
Depending on the style and aim of the letter, you will need to adapt your greeting.
Always start an informal letter in the ways:
- Dear + name
- Hi / Hello + name
‘Dear...’ is more appropriate, so stick with this.
For a formal letter there are two options for the greeting:
- Use Dear Sir or Madam if you don’t know the name of the person you are writing to.
- Use Dear + surname if you do know their name, e.g. Dear Mr Smith or Dear Mrs Jones.