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In some countries more and more people are becoming interested in foinding out bout the history of the house or building they live in

#countries #people #bout #history #house
Nowadays, some
people
 who have recently bought a
house
 or building
curious
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 about
the
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 past of
its
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it
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. It can be some reasons
about
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why some
people
 would do anything for knowing about the
history
on
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of
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 their
house
. There are many reasons that someone
want
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 to know about the
history
 of their building,
such
 as
the
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construction
 of it. Some
people
 want to know if the building
have
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a
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good
construction
 or not.
Thus
, many
people
 believe if the building
have
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 a strong foundation
on
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in
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 their home,
so
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it can make them feel safe from
earthquake
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an earthquake
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 or other bad conditions.
However
, if the
house
 had a bad
construction
, and if there is an earthquake, absolutely the building will destroy and for some
reason
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 they will have more
outcome
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 to rebuild their building.
On the other hand
, some
people
 want to know about the past of the
house
 when they bought an old
house
. After that, if the
house
 is
haunting
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, they
are
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certainly want to know what was behind
about
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it, why is that
house
 haunted?
Furthermore
, if they have a reason
about
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 that home, they have
chances
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,
move
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 out to another
house
 or stay in that home. Almost
people
 who want to know something about
the
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construction
 can ask it with worker
contsrution
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construction
 who
builded
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built
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 that building. Some
people
 tend to ask about the
house
history
 from their neighbours, it can be
easily
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 to ask them due
the
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to the
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 near
from
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to
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 their
house
. Perhaps, some neighbours
has
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have
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 lived
in
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for
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 a long time than other, so they have knowledge about what happened in the past, is there any accident in the
house
 or
no
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not
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.
Although
,
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others
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people
 who just have moved into their
house
 would search about the
history
in
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on
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 the Internet, they can easily just type on their gadget.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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