Government investment in the arts, such as music and theatre, is a waste of money. Governments must invest this money in piblic services instead. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

I strongly disagree with the proposition that the Government must divert investments in the various art forms to public
services
. There are various reasons why I consider
this
to be an egregious sentiment and I could expand on each consideration below.
While
there is no doubting the importance of public
services
, we must be cognizant of the fact that the very people who use these
services
also
need to rejuvenate and relax. Music is a great example of an immediate mood uplifter. It has the ability to transport someone to an ephemeral state of nirvana.
Although
individuals may have varied tastes, there is no paucity of genres. With greater investment in music, we can expect an increase
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a wider pool of talent, especially amongst the teenage and young adult age groups. Despite its diminishing popularity, the art form of theatre is one
that is
upheld in great esteem amongst the erudite. It is a throwback to the bygone era when we did not have access to the television or social media. An injection of investment in
this
may be the
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push it needs to regain popularity amongst the nation's youth. Throughout time, we have witnessed several eras of great literature and
subsequently
fantastic theatre and with
further
investment, we could
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Romeo and Juliet. In conclusion, regardless of what my personal views on the arts are, I still believe
this
infusion of money should be equitable and homogenous rather than a unilateral exercise. Public
services
continue to be a vital pillar of the civilised society and
therefore
, investments in
this
sector should
also
be reflective of
this
without ignoring the several enchanting art forms.
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