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In some countries, more and more people are becoming interested in finding out about the history of the house or building they live in.

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Nowadays, some
people
 who have recently bought a
house
 or building are curious about its past of its. It can be some reasons about some
people
 would do anything to know about the past in their building.
This
 essay will argue what causes
people
 to be curious about the
story
 of how their building is built and the
story
 behind¬¬ it. There are many reasons that someone wants to know the past of their building.
Such
 as its
construction
. Some
people
 want to know if it has good
construction
 or not.
Thus
, many
people
 believe if the building has a strong foundation in their
home
, it can make them feel safe from earthquakes or other disasters.
However
, if the
house
 had bad
construction
,
then
 the building is destroyed by earthquakes. So, it can make a disadvantage for the owner. They will spend more money to rebuild the
house
.
On the other hand
, some
people
 want to know about the past of their
home
 when they bought an old
house
.
for example
, If the
house
 is haunted, they want to know what was behind it and why is that
house
 haunted.
Furthermore
, if they have a reason for that
home
, they have chances, whether they move to another
house
 or stay in.
People
 who want to know something about the structure can ask with worker
construction
 who built it.
On the other hand
, some
people
 tend to ask about the
story
 of the
house
 of their neighbours, it is easier to ask them
due to
 the near place from their
house
. Some neighbours have lived in the area longer than others, so they have knowledge about what happened in the past, and whether is there any accidents in that area.
Although
,
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 other
people
 who just have moved into their
home
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 would search about the history on the Internet, they can easily just type on their gadget. In conclusion, many reasons can make
people
 more eager to know about their houses’ past.
For instance
, the
story
 can be obtained from different resources
such
 as
people
 who live near their houses and on the internet
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    • Sentence 2 - Example
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