many manufactured food and drink products contain high levels of sugar, which causes many health problems. sugary products should be made more expensive to encourage people to cosume less sugar. do you agree or disagree?

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It is a widely known fact that food
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contains a huge amount of sugar and additives, which pose several health problems,
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, it is suggested to increase the price of sugary snacks and drinks so that
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consumption declines. I agree to some extent with
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plan but in general, I tend to disagree
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the following reasons.
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, products ,which contain sugar, are more affordable than so-called healthy alternatives.
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not everyone can buy organic and healthy foods.
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the lack of nutritious value of these products, despite the fact that they are tasty and desirable.
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, unlike other dishes, manufactured foods are not time-consuming and they are beneficial especially for
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who do not have enough time to cook for themselves because of long working hours.
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, it is our personal responsibility to maintain our health and to decide whether to listen to the experts or not. Some
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care a lot about their health condition, so they go on healthy diets and do exercises regularly,
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, some do not care enough about their lifestyles.
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, it is wrong to prescribe their diets by increasing the prices, because nobody likes that; especially if it is from the government.
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, sugary commodities are only harmful when they are eaten excessively. In conclusion, we should be careful with the amount of unhealthy food we consume, because making manufactured foods more expensive is not a logical solution and it will not encourage
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to eat more
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. So
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people
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we should increase public awareness.
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