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The bar chart provides information about how families in a country spent weekly income in both 1968 and in 2018.

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The diagram illustrates the expenditure of family units in eight different areas in 1968 and 2018, namely
food
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, housing, fuel and power, clothing and footwear, household
goods
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, personal
goods
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, transport, and
leisure
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. Units are measured in percentages.
Overall
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, the highest amount of
money
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 was spent on
food
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 in 1968,
whereas
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 the community spent the most
money
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 on
leisure
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 in 2018.
Moreover
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,
food
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 expenditure has the widest disparity between 1968 and 2018.
According to
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 the graph, payment for
food
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, fuel and power, and personal
goods
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 saw a decline over the period of fifty years.
In contrast
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, more
money
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 was spent on housing, transport, and
leisure
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 in the given period. Spending on
food
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 was 35% in 1968 and approximately 18% in 2018,
while
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 society spent roughly 8% of their all
money
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 on
leisure
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 in 1968 and almost 23% in 2018. Housing has the same proportion as clothing and footwear in 1968 which was 10%, yet the former is under four times as large as the latter in 2018. (almost 20% and 5% respectively.) It is
also
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 observed that fuel and power expenses and personal good expense share the same levels in 1968 but in 2018, marginally greater amounts were spent on personal
goods
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.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words food, goods, leisure, money with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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